Thread: Work in Progress Please Comment

Hello all,
Several of you have helped thus far. I have made some changes, please feel free to let me know what you think.
Thank you,
Brian
Bmangraphix.com

Hi Brian,
Instead of a new post you should add this to the thread you already have regarding your site.

You need to have someone that hasn't stared at your site for days and check all spelling and grammar. At first glance I noticed two glaring mistakes, apperal and stationary, should be apparel and stationery. You have a great start.... keep up the good work.
Remember though, with the heavy graphics you have in the background don't add more or you run the chance of this being too busy.

Echo what Dori has said regarding grammar and spelling errors. Attention detail is what will set you apart in your business, and if you have this type of basic error on your site it doesn't look too good.
I didn't look at all your pages, but on the pricing page, your pay pal buttons are sitting on top of the prices..can't see 'em.
Great start - some tweaking and you will be there..

Agree with Dori and Liz, mistakes still there and they do stand out. All in all it looks great.

Looks good so far, nice colours and layout. I don't know if the writing on the left on the portfolio page and other sub pages should be links or not, if so they don't work but also it goes behind a banner so is hard to read the bottom part. Your banner just needs pushing down a little. Good work so far though.

Thank you all for your help again so far,
I made the speliing corrections and the alignment problems did not appear in my browser as the did for you. But I tweaked them anyways let me know please if there is still a problem.
Thanks,
Brian

On your pricing links and contact pages the bluevoda box on the left is sitting on the word 'product'
No price on the basic package
That's all I could see on quick look.
Definately looking better. Good work.

I found my eyes to be darting all around the page looking for one thing to focus on that would hold my attention or make me want to go further into the site. the nave links on the left side don't seem to match the rest of the feel of the index page. The colors were OK but the way the page is cut up was unpleasant for me to try and concentrate on what to do. The colors of the page at the header and the footer draw my eyes to them but my eyes are not drawn towards any particular call to action.

Originally Posted by motoxxx

I found my eyes to be darting all around the page looking for one thing to focus on that would hold my attention or make me want to go further into the site. the nave links on the left side don't seem to match the rest of the feel of the index page. The colors were OK but the way the page is cut up was unpleasant for me to try and concentrate on what to do. The colors of the page at the header and the footer draw my eyes to them but my eyes are not drawn towards any particular call to action.

Wow,
I appreciate everyone's comments so far that have given me constructive advice and help in correcting mistakes and what not. I stock much trust in facts more than opinions so if any one has any thing else to add I would appreciate it. My graphics all line up in my browser so I am not to sure how to address that issue. I am not to sure what the word "nave" relates to in the world of design but none the less I carry on.
Brian
BmanGraphix

okay i'm a legal secretary so grammar and spelling: HUGE.

1st paragraph, last sentence: either say reasonable prices or at a reasonable price.

2nd paragraph, for YOUR individual or company business

Contact Page: the Blue Voda banner is overriding the word
"Products"

Same issue on your Services Pricing page and the Links page

You've got Stationary/Stationery spelled two ways throughout.

looks good!

Maritza

Okay,
I believe I have taken care of my grammar and spelling issues. I don't know why I have such a problem with the word Stationery:)
Also, I have removed the Voda banner on the pricing and links pages. In my browser when I view my pages I never encounter an alignment problem but to eliminate it all together I just left the banner on the home page. Will this be acceptable by BV for the affiliate agreement?
Thanks again for now.
Brian
BmanGraphix