Thread: New web. I need comments & advise.

Hi everybody, I will appreciate your comments and inputs about this web that I have done for a friend of mine.

www.premiercareclinic.com

Alas

Hi, site looks great, loads well & has the right feel for its content. Nice to see you have taken the time to blend the forum in with the sites colours. (Not many do this)
The only thing you might have to go through is the key words & descriptions, they seemed to be the same & not relating to individual page content.

Good luck.

Hi Chris, I always appreciate your comments, I will have a look at the keywords & description, and fix it.
Saluti
Alas

Chris, I just made some changes on those fields ( keywords & description).
What do you think?
regards

You did a beautiful job.. 5 stars all the way.. well done.. Great color too!

Pickels
www.salobrenacleaners.com

Site looks great nice feel to it hope the person you made it for agrees. good luck with it.

Thanks to both of you, i appreciated your positive comments.
Alas

it looks great ... the only thing I thought was the header maybe too small (proportionally) for the layout of the pages ...

Originally Posted by alas

Chris, I just made some changes on those fields ( keywords & description).
What do you think?
regards

Hi, On the few pages i looked at, IE:index, none of the phrases in the key word area match what is on the page.
<meta name="KEYWORDS" content="dar es salaam clinic,
dar es salaam hospital, dar es salaam doctor,
dar es salaam gynaecology, dar es salaam pediatric.">

What you place a keyword or phrase, it should match text on the page.

Correct, you are right, I think I was not giving enough attention.
Thanks
Alas

Good balance and flow throughout.....another well-thought example of how potential emerges with resplendant vitality: even the forum skin and colors compliment your overall theme.

The only thing that kept popping up to me was some awkward grammar and word usage here and there. It may be idiomatic to how English is used in Tanzania, but when constantly weaving in references to US expectations or creduality (adhereing to Embassy stipulations) I would expect a tighter composition. No big deal, but I did notice on more than 2 pages:
Main Page: Premier Care provides a high end comprehensive GP service in exceptional surroundings. Our company has established excellent relationships with specialist consultants throughout Tanzania. >> Should either use "Premier Care", "We have" or "Our facility" rather than go outside of context established previously.
Clinic Page: A. The Clinic offers the full range of services seen on this website >> No...never say "on this website" etc. but rather "The Clinic regularly offers a full range of professional services, which include .... and additional services as may be prescribed or arranged prior" or something similar. > Explain...amplify, and describe; don't simply "state" and hope to link incongruent sentences/concepts: create a 'flow" of understanding (illumination) to a directed conclusion (or for some, a "broadened perspective").
B. We are the only panel physicians for the US embassy immigrant visa applications, and appointments can be arranged with results given within a few days of you been seen. Try "...within a few days after your visitation" or "...after having been seen" or even "...after your visit."

And so on.

Really a grand build, though, old Friend! Bravo!

Hello Generalissimo,
Like always I have no words to thank you enough.
I will go trough the text and follow your suggestion ( english is not my mother language).
GRAZIE MILLE !
Alas

Alas,
I'm not good with the tech stuff so volunteer to help with copy where I can. I changed the lead to bullet points. If you'd like help with any more I can, but don't want to keep going if this is overstepping what you asked for. I think your site is beautiful!

Premiere Care Clinic offers a full range of services.
We care about offering you the very best service and we care about you.
Our services include:
*Private GP and Ultrasound services
*Walk-in instant HIV testing
*Occupational Health (consulting?)
*General and travel vaccinations
*STD/STI tests
*Referrals for xrays and scans
with follow up consultation and
*A full range of blood and pathology tests
Our services are always confidential.
Tests that are not available in Tanzania are (express?) couriered to the Lancet Laboratories in South Africa.
We are the exclusive panel (of?) physicians for the US Embassy. We handle Immigrant Visa applications, with results given quickly, usually within a few days. Patients may walk in or call for an appointment; no documentation is required for registration.
CORPORATE
We perform Executive Health Screenings and offer Corporate Health Services to local companies, including pre-employment medical exams, drug screening and long term sickness evaluations. Our services include same day consultations.
Premier Care offers competitive and complete corporate health care packages tailor made to each company's requirements. We offer these services directly though our clincic. Our team will gladly assist your HR department with developing a flexible and cost effective healthcare program for your workforce.

Hi,

I am not sure where I have come in on this or what work has been done so wanted to say what a good looking, well functioning site you have created,

dave

Hi Dave thank you very much for your positive input.
Also, Catherine I must say that you have been very nice in taking your time to help me. Thanks a lot.
I am waiting for a response from the website owner so I can proceed with the text change.
Ciao
Alas

Dave, if I understood you about what work I have done.
I have integrated Bluevoda ( page from home to about us) with the contact form provided by Naval Design ( ABVFP ) which is a GREAT way to create a contact page, and from Fantastico ( PHPBB3 ) I took the forum ( news & forums )feature ( GOOGLE LOVES IT ).
I have not finish yet with the web, and Google has already indexed 7 pages, and there are all from the forum.
Saluti
Alas

Alas,

Nice site, but being in the Health Care field myself, one question on the site is not being answered. What is the cost of services? Like how much is a ultrasound? What type of insurance to they except? Medicaid, Medicare, Bluecross, Avlac etc, these can be major selling points, also, if the patient does not have insurance do they work out arrangments for paying for services, is this health center public or privately funded??

Just a thought!!

Daniel-
www.jaxplus.net

Nice clean and green.

http://www.premiercareclinic.com/pre...aam-about.html The banner did not have a photo of the team just the words.

My own view is that the main body block should have a gap between that and the banner.

From what I can see above you used BV. It reminds me to get a forum organised!

I was also wondering if you really need all the information and detail you request on the contactform page. Where possible I think less is best. Is a security code needed or just a nice feature?

Regards
Muzz

Hi Daniel,
I agree with, I am planning to that in the forum, the reason for that is: I have design the web in Bluevoda, and this web is not for me but for a friend of mine, and it will not be easy for him to make changes or update the web unless he has a knowledge of Bluevoda, but having the cost in the forum section he can access it and update the information without touching the structure of the web. Thank you for your suggestion.

Hi Muzz,
I am waiting for pictures to place in the about us page, I have used Naval Design contact form, and I could have skipped some information but the customer can do that too.
The security code comes with the contact form, I guess is to limit spam emails. Thanks to you too.
Alas