Thread: Which page is Best

I'm bring back "The Everlasting Story" and have tons to do..But your thoughts are always needed. This is written for kids by kids.



http://www.fastlincs.com/the-everlasting-story3.html
http://www.fastlincs.com/the-everlasting-story.html

Hello Sharon,

Second one for SURE! I loved it, but loads a little slow. Your title reminds me of the never ending story. But 2nd one really stood out for me. =)

I like that 1 too.
Thanks

Hi Sharon,
I love both, the second opens faster and that may influence some choices.
I love the idea, and hope that lots of kids learn to use their imaginations in new ways as a result of exposure to it!
There can be no surer way of instilling a love of reading & writing within them, than getting them involved in the processes early.
Bravo,

Thanks Mark, maybe somehow I can fix it..Any One Ideas?

I have had another look and on balance No. 2 is better graphically.
As for speeding it up, one of our many experts will need to have a look. But once it has downloaded it reloads very quickly.
If it is for kids, I think they will wait just to see what unfolds. The slow download may actually prove to be a positive, in the end?

Ha Ha Love your thinking!

I added another 1
http://www.fastlincs.com/the-everlasting-story23.html

Rohi has really good work , he has a gallery on one of the stores i shop at for my 3d stuff :) (dont take me as a jerk) just hope you got his permission to use it if you do use it :).

yep, it was free..So which one?

i have to say rohi's , it just makes you think of a fairy tale and it has the falls/water is ever lasting or least makes you think of ever lasting :)
first one i dont like the text kind of fades in the picture coz it has to much color going on , 2nd one is nice , it looks from the image a fight evil vs good type deal.

Thanks...Let me know if you need a link..

I go with the Rohi's one now too. That's amazing fantasy art.

Both are loading really slow.
To fix it would be my priority as people are not really patient...
Keep up with the good work!
Cheers,

I'm using this 1..Really slow to load? For me it is pretty quick!
http://www.fastlincs.com/the-everlasting-story.html

Amazing graphics and not that slow for me. (wifi 56kbs) great choice!

Awesome! I like the 2nd link the best. The 1st link is great too but appears a little on the girl side.

Thanks to everyone who had a hand in helping me..Now go read the book and have you kids add to it!

#3 loading really good!

BUT - do you think if should be better to make your "ENTRANCE" button a little bit more visible (I was looking for it really hard on the page)
best regards

glad to be able to help! :)

It doesn't load too slow for me, it's a little slow, but not annoyingly slow =P

Cool, love the idea. I cannot see much difference apart from story.html has the book jiggling up an down a little bit as you turn the pages.

A couple of suggestions:

- the image on the homepage should be click-able to start the story. When I first went into story3.html I could not find the "enter" button because it was off the page and I had to scroll down to find it.

- For the same reason, I think the "next" and "back" keys would be better placed in a more prominent place if possible as they are often down the page too far (a left and right arrow might be more in character than words as well)

Lastly.... "To Be Continuted" and "Queen Continuted" it might pay to checked your spelling