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    Default requesting help for improvement

    I am new in making Website.
    I have done whatever I learned from Forums.
    Now I need help for improvement.
    Please, any Feed back for improvemrnt would be highly appreciated.
    I will do my best to follow all my friends instructions.

    Thank you,
    Feroz
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    Default Re: requesting help for improvement

    need a link to your site in order to help!
    Never measure the height of the mountain you're climbing. At the summit, look back and see how small it really is!

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    Default Re: requesting help for improvement

    Thank you, Ahimsa,

    It is: discounttradings.com.
    Feroz

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    OK, Feroz,
    here we go:
    first reaction - too many Capital Letters & if you must use them, then be consistent............

    in the following my changes/suggestions in
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    1st. page: Buy Real Estate with a lot of Equity & no hassle
    We buy & sell houses in any condition anywhere in the US & CANADA
    EVERYTHING WITH DISCOUNT
    "Any thing you can Buy....................10 to 20 % discount" - I would change this whole text to something like:
    "If you Email us the link/site advertising any real estate for sale we will offer the same for between 10% & 20% less" (- BUT I would be VERY,VERY careful about stating something like that?)


    "Sell your house" - Sell your house without any hassle
    We don't want to list your house and forget about it!
    We have buyers who want to buy your house.
    (If you want to emphasise a word underlining or another colouris more effective than Capital letters, or use un-bold font for un-stressed words & bold for the emphasis)
    It does not matter if the house needs a laundry, has a list of repairs,
    or is just plain “ugly.” We know how to make them sell.

    that is stalled. - I don't understand this, sorry!
    ---so I think you have a little work to do :) but you've made a good start...keep going...
    david

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