Re: New website need some help.
Loks like you have already started adjustments. I just have one thing to add, to what has been said. I would replace all the third person, and make it first person to make it a little more personal. This is a big investment, and those that are looking would feel more at ease with a one on one type of personal contact. Other than that and what has been said, you are well on your way. Good Luck!!
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